Thursday, 3 November 2022

Spellbreaker, by Charlie M Holmberg

Elsie is assistant to a stonemason and also a secret spellbreaker in a Victorian England where magic rules, rather than science and technology. An orphan with abandonment issues, Elsie has contributed her talents for many years to a secret organisation she believes is dedicated to freeing up magic for the poor and oppressed. When she is caught on a secret mission by aspiring magic master Bacchus Kelsey, he obtains her help in return for not turning her in to the authorities. There is a lot going on in this very complicated story, which gets bogged down in too much exposition and florid description. The plot relies on unlikely coincidences and the wilful ignorance of its otherwise intelligent protagonist. Its resolution reads as though made up on the fly. This has the bones of a good tale, with some interesting characters, but needed at least one more draft and a damn good edit to make it work.

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